strained metaphors and woolly explanations
one solid example
Amy Falls Down
Jincy Willett digression after
the shape of the story, the description of the story if you will: saucy, sparkling, witty, unexpected, etc. that's what the story's "about"
the shitty example from your own writing!
one solid example
Amy Falls Down
Jincy Willett digression after
the shape of the story, the description of the story if you will: saucy, sparkling, witty, unexpected, etc. that's what the story's "about"
the shitty example from your own writing!
early draft
He stowed the window. They'd work out the rest: strategize amongst themselves & in the riot of chat; Pm & B/w, bickering. Jake habitually conjectured re: mutual attraction in cases such as theirs.
At any rate, they'd do that.
He'd do this.
later draft
He'd let her know out of respect[...]
Respect, also, for process.
The difference between a guild with leet players and a leet guild, Jake would say, is process.
Of course—Jake would add, half-smiling—y'need leet players, too.
The difference between a guild with leet players and a leet guild, Jake would say, is process.
Of course—Jake would add, half-smiling—y'need leet players, too.