As if it were the engine of time it displayed.
clarity mission
"engine of time"
it's not clear. you're already attempting something a bit figurative here; the concept of the phone as an 'engine of time', the concept of EMMY IMAGINING the phone as an 'engine of time' and therefore tossing it aside, the very physical action that Emmy undertakes, which is described with this clay's customary cute-ness about pronouns and prepositions (uses few, sometimes).
basically you need a 'the'. so the reader's eye/mind isn't caught on the single streaming phrase, 'engine of time', which is half-right but derails the form and therefore meaning of the sentence, and therefore the whole beat
As if it were the engine of the time it displayed.
okay but not okay
too many syllables
which breaks the whole point, the whole reason for being
not just of this beat but, literally, the whole text
the gods are displeased at this
As if it manufactured the time it displayed.
okay!
you will change this, no doubt, when you pass here again